Thursday, June 26, 2025

Romeo & Juliet Met on the Internet 598 - thoughts on songwriting

 Version 

Modern Romance

She told me secrets. how they met

I don't think their families knew

On a dating site, the internet

I'm sharing this secret with you



There Romeo met Juliet 

He sent red hearts, meet on blue zoom

She stopped swiping others right, left

 Decorated her jungle room


She  washed and perfumed her long, soft hair

Poured a whisky glass of  - water

Tossed dice to decide what to wear

Listened to jokes and canned laughter


Doubts

Two strangers had a fraught moment

A moment of caution and doubt

He checked on her, she checked on him 

They found out it all checked out


A PR seller is never a fool

He asked her, 'Are you ready?

Are you prepared to follow rules?'

She smiled and said, let's go steady  


A great a fairy tale will begin

She's a graceful model and tall

He's tall, dark, handsome, so win-win 

It looked like they both had it all


The wedding' booked on an island

They've chosen the dress and song

The small flower girl's excited

What could go wrong?. His doubts were strong.


'Friends, our wedding has been cancelled .."

'We're sorry, what a dreadful mess

Flights can't be cancelled. Hotels, too

The worst distress is losing you.'


Feedback And Verdict

He worked hard, years, building his house

And he would never give it up

Was it too late. too last minute 

To present her with a pre-nup?


I guessed what the contract had said

'The house stays mine, but you'll be fine'?

You could see she wasn't happy

She asked, "What if I won't sign?"


His sister can't give him advice

Although she has been married twice

The one she ignored long ago

Turned up again to be her beau.


I pray one day, in summy weather

Maybe after years apart

Two lost loves will get back together

And vow, this time theyll never part


Second time round, we'll never part.

-ends-

Standard Song With Chorus

A standard song is three verses, three minutes, a chorus, which every body remembers because it is reapeated, at the started, twice between verses, at the end. You hear the chorus 

Two Cancelled Weddings

I recall a cancelled wedding of a second cousin when I was a teenager. 

I finally wrote the poem about a cancelled wedding in 2025, reminded of that by hearing of a cancelled wedding in an in-laws' family. However, many of the factors are universal, over time in different countries. 

Modern Romance & Weddings

Nowadays, meeting on the internet, prenups. 

My mother was a war, WW2, widow. So I am the child of her second husband. 

Nowadays, instead of war widows, a more comon scenario is a divorced partner, a second marriage, one partner already having a house which they don't want to lose, having a pre-nup.  If you start to tell a story with multiple verses, you end up with a ballad. It takes longer. It is more suitable for a performance by a solo artist with a guitar, or piano accompaniment.

Tennis Club Trouble - Lesson Learned

 I recall doing standup comedy in a tennis club. People at the front would talk to each other. At the back people got up to order at the bar and talked to each other. 

Asking The Audience Questions

How do you keep the audience involved? You keep the aidoemce involved with the an opening song with a chorus, by asking questions, and getting audience involvement.

The audience ansers will always be different. Sometimes a surprise. Sometimes challenging. 

In a song you can ask a rhetorical question.  'Where have all the flowers gone?' You can end the song with no answer, or a metaphor, such as the well known song phrase, 'the answer is blowing in the wind'. You can take a cliche, or create one, by asking a profound, serious question, but giving an everyday answer. / 

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